Help me write a sentence

by Lysii Arasa
14th April 2022

How best to write a sentence:
"Then Tom pulled the wire through the pieces of meat and flipped them over the fire" or "Then Tom flipped the pieces of meat over the fire, through which he pulled the wire."

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Although I believe that sentence structure depends on your unique writing style, I believe the first sentence seems more genuine. https://gmailguide.io

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24/06/2022

Hi Tom, I'd go with the first - the second is more ambiguous and sounds like you're pulling the wire through the fire

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13/06/2022

Hi Lysii,

I personally think that the structuring of sentences does depend on your own writing style, but I'd say that the first sentence is the more natural sounding one.

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