chapter 6 running away

by katherine swain
2nd March 2013

Hey guys..I've posted my 6th chapter to read!

Id be grateful for the feedback, grammar issues etc and thank you all for your help and support :)

Kat

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I always go on such an emotional roller coaster with your writing. I felt so angry and upset when I read this chapter. (that's good!) You have such a brilliant ability to pull the reader into the story and make them feel for you.

Brilliant writing. Can't wait for the next chapter!!

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02/03/2013

Thanks!!

Great advice!! done!!

I'm learning all the time:)

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02/03/2013

Great improvement. Always attempt to tighten. It will hit with more punch.

He pulled his hand from my face. Thank god for that…..I could breath now.

I inhaled deeply, filling my lungs with whisky reeking air; this was the biggest nightmare of my life. I just wanted it to end.

Maybe I was dreaming, and I would wake in the sanctuary of my bedroom.

The seagulls squawked above cliff tops, and the cold sea air blew past my window.

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