A little light entertainment?

by David Foster
20th March 2013

With all the discussion of first sentences and paragraphs perhaps we can have a little fun?

I began a recent response with "Like an ex-smoker I can have a distate for something I have escaped from - but there is still the occasional craving..."

I winder whether anyone would like to play with this sentence as the start of a paragraph to share here? Probably keeping preety close to the original but maybe ameding tense or viewpoint?

Anyone want to have a go?

David

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Great last line, Frank. But why the need for an apology? Is it just because yo have used some of my ideas? If it's meant to be a parody, I don't think it works - at least not for me. Your paragraph is too different.

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24/03/2013

I could not resist, sorry Constantin:

Like any ex-prostitute I  have a distaste for something I have escaped from - but there is still the occasional craving.  Never, ever for the pleasure of the mortal. But their was always a beauty a symmetry even in my wasted life. However painful and unbearable, I could never allow it all to become ugly. I open my mouth and exhale this last moment that spins away out of control.

Like a disappearing silk highway to yesterday.

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Frank Sonderborg
22/03/2013

My father stopped smoking abruptly with a health issue scare. He told me that 25 years later that he still had the occasional craving for a cigar. I have never smoked so can only imagine. Here is my version...

Like an ex-smoker I can have a distaste for something from which I have escaped - but there is still the occasional craving. Age has not removed the memories. The person is dead but still living within me as I tilt my head back to receive the warm, healing light from an afternoon sun. An abusive husband is perhaps the hardest from which to escape because his power insidiously undermines that of his wife. He is gone now and I am free but I find myself still craving those moments of intimacy where my body felt recompensed for enduring the rest.

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