I have just posted an excerpt from a chapter of my latest work in progress. It is unedited, but I have managed to confuse myself with this scene.
Basically, my wizard Julian is completing a set of magical challenges in a puzzle-type arena for the queen of the fairies (it's a long story). He comes across two guards blocking his way. One always tells the truth, the other always lies. He needs to figure out which.
The problem is, he doesn't really want to play ball with them and goes way off track. The question is, does his deviated logic seem correct to you?
Any advice would be welcome as a double-check for my own sanity. Thanks in advance.
Have read it -
Does your hero swear at people? "Bloody stupid" Unusual suitor for a Princess's hand?
It seems like an awful lot of work to get to a forgone conclusion - he is your hero - so he's going to get through.
Are Goblin's fairies?
Also - might it be better if, instead of all question and answer, you dealt with your hero's thought process? Maybe played a trick (rather than applying physical force) on the guards?