Nowadays, Technology is an integral part with human life. People like mounted with mobile phone, computer and television everywhere, every time. So, they do less time for physical activities and it causes a lot of harmful diseases for their health. I totally agree that this situation is occurring everyday and hard to change their habits.
Firstly, People use more and more technology in their lives to satisfy their individual hobbits. Playing games, shopping online, working online, doing everything with technology makes the life coming easier. However, this also makes people coming lazy to do some physical exercise, the main reason causes to most of popular diseases nowadays such as obesity due to lack of exercise, back pain caused by sitting whole day in the offices and eyesore due to working long time with computers.
Secondly, Most of people stay in a technology box. Eat, Sleep, work with technology is in one place. They almost don’t want to go outside to relaxing as what we did in the past when the technology did not come fast like nowadays. Physical activities is almost done by athletes, girls wanting keep fit and the boys wishing to make a strong and nice bodies . And they almost do these activities indoor. They are afraid of the environment outside which could be bad, unclear and also don’t want to be far away with technology at their home.
So, a lot of reasons which make people use technology coming lazy in doing exercise, although they aware very clear these technology impacts to their health harmful and dangerous. The best way is make people becoming friendly with physical exercise such as tourism, walking around and visiting with their families.
Hi, Na Tran!
Please get yourself a translator if you're planning to offer your essay for publication. Am I right in guessing that you're Vietnamese? As someone whose first language was Cantonese, then forgot almost ALL of it when I learned English (I was away from Asia for a year when I was very young and my family stopped speaking Cantonese at home... even when we moved back), I know that there are really HUGE differences between the way that Asians and Europeans structure sentences.
This is also true within European languages, though perhaps not to such a great extent. Let me give you an example:
In English, if you're feeling that the air temperature is too low, you say: "I'm cold". If you said this in Spanish, Catalan, French, or German, you would be saying that you are a cold person (a cold-hearted person). To express the first concept in Catalan, French, or Catalan, you would say: "I have cold". In German you would say: "It is cold to me."
Inversely, if you said either of these sentences in English, people just wouldn't understand you. "I have cold" would be understood as a mistaken attempt to say: "I have a cold" - that is, that you are ill with the common cold or influenza. If you said: "It is cold to me", people would wonder WHAT was being cold (cold-hearted?) to you. Maybe your pet dog?
English is now the language that I speak best, but I use Spanish and Catalan very much more often on a day-to-day basis, and I speak them very well. But - believe me - I have problems translating my OWN stories from English into one of these.
I REALLY don't want to hurt your feelings, but your English is not up to expressing yourself clearly to the extent that it should be for publishing essays. Please get yourself a translator... and here I DON'T mean somebody to polish up your English, but somebody who understands your own language, so that they understand EXACTLY what you want to say. (You don't want somebody who will 'correct' "I have cold" into "I have a cold", when you MEANT "I am cold"!)
Hello, you have a few missed placed words jumping out at me: 'integral part with human life' should be 'of human life'.
'people like' should be 'people are' that sentence sounds rather odd, perhaps try 'people have a mobile phone, computer and television, on one device that is with them all the time.'
'so they do less' should be 'so they have less'
'and hard to change' should be 'and it is hard to change.'
'individual hobbits' should be 'habits' a hobbit is a small man that lives on middle earth.
'makes the life coming easier' should be 'makes life easy'
'makes people coming lazy' shoudl be ' however this makes people too lazy to do physical exercise.' Note that full stop because the following sentence is too long.
"the main reason causes to most of popular diseases nowadays such as obesity due to lack of exercise, back pain caused by sitting whole day in the offices and eyesore due to working long time with computers." this needs rewriting. "Lack of movement causes many popular diseases nowadays, such as obesity. There are other complications associated with lack of movement such as back pain from sitting all day, and eyesore due to working long hours with computers."
"don’t want to go outside to relaxing as " should be 'to relax'
"physical activities is almost " should be 'is only done"
beware google translate if that is what you used, it gets confused really easily. Apart from the changes above I do have to question some of your theory. Technology can be a really useful tool for exercise. you can track your heart rate, count calories as you work out, you can use it to teach you new work out routines and improving your form.
I do agree that we are dormant too long during the working hours, and that many people are lazy, but I don't believe that people are more lazy because of the technology they are using.
I think the main problem with your essay is that you don't have any sources to back up your opinions. who did studies or published academic papers saying that technology makes people lazy. has anybody else employed a correlation between technology use and obesity?
Good luck with your essay.