What do you think about the text?One night
Softly, anchored in the greatness of the word, love came.
"I love you" ...
Graphic, powerful, stripped, giving itself generously like a
promissory note without retirement or protest, to remind them of the
simplicity of things and they rolled, contemplating them so lined up,
challenging them to measure the geography of desire where both were
consumed, not as far as he seemed not as close as they desired by
guessing the manners, the looks, the scents of bodies and the
bittersweet compulsion of sex ...
To hell with the world, the conventions and the time to flee in their
awake! Love was thus a long history of patience to leaf through the
next chapters, with attendance. He, seething, pretending to be simple,
to give himself completely without remorse, a gift, an exchange
without receipt or invoice in joyful living and the hustle and her
trying to catch him in the brief dash strokes in a short sketch where
briefly, the body had spent the night, but the heart stayed a lifetime
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Thank you all. I'll follow the advice and improve the text ...
It is one of those passages which demands to be slowed down. This is not a bad thing; on the contrary it is better because of it.
*done this*