My apologies to anyone who tried to view my post I thought I was lucky to get the whole chapter in, didn't notice the banner at the bottom the first time saying 3000 words only, so now it's just short. Unfortunately it finishes before the rest of the action but there you go...
Regards Paul
Thank you for taking the time to read through it, did it it read ok to you or is there anything that is sticky or maybe even doesn't belong, you know what it's like when it's your baby no other baby comes close so you don't see the faults?
Regards Paul
Hello Paul
I like it, it took me to the scene, where all the rush was happening. After reading some lines, I felt like a bystander, encountering the mishap myself. I want to read more, as in what happens next.
A good read.