I have a short story "Holes and Other Things" published on Penny Shorts - I'd really appreciate any reviews/ratings. It's 50p to download but cheaper than a can of coke and will hopefully give you a smile for the day!
http://www.pennyshorts.com/stories/ghost/holes-and-other-things/
Hi Dan
Not sure how these reviews are meant to go so please forgive if I have over stepped or not met the spec.
I just read this story over my morning coffee and nearly spilt it in several places because I was laughing so much- unexpected response I might add.
Loved it all but especially:
'filosopy'
'wooden bench crusty with bird poo' that we all know and hate so much;
'the mound flattened considerably'
The paragraphs that started with ' Trev tightened his grip on his spade... nodded in reluctant comprehension...' The first two sentences signalled my first raucous outbreak of giggles
By the time I got to 'Say again , guv' the tears of laughter were running down my face
There were two small bits I didn't get
The line 'Possibly their manager too...' At first I realised that I had read, in my minds eye - Possibly their manager too, crouching forward on the bench, if he wasn't...'
and
the line, 'So was Trev's'
Thank you for this, it was fun entertainment. It was painted like a film running in front of my eyes. In my book ( pun intended) that made it a grand story I believed in.