Sudden occurances

by Sarah Pollitt
16th May 2013

What would be the ideal way to write and set up a surprise so to speak in a book for example an explosion or a gunshot that kills someone suddenly. How can you write it in a manner that makes it seem sudden? Because so far I've just been saying for example 'and there was peace in the stre- BOOM! Chaos' along those lines. Will that suffice or is there a more smooth/clean way to go about this? I hope this makes sense

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You can also go a step beyond the low-flying head...

Ignoring the "no smoking" sign Jacob put a cigarette to his lips...

New chapter -

Strange beeps penetrated the darkness in Jacob's head. He seemed to be restrained on his back - unable to open his eyes.

'He's showing signs of consciousness'.

The voice sounded like a nurse.

-- Of course to achieve this it would be rather necessary for his whole body and not just his head to have flown across the room...

:-)

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"I can't see how any-"

Jacob's head flew across the room as the gas main exploded.

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