(I have always loved comics and one day i decide that i would start writing one. I'm not the strongest writer but I do have ideas coming from everywhere on everything. I'm about to start a writing course to get stronger at the simple things and hopefully my ideas aren't a crock. If any artists out there want a crack at doing a bit of concept art please do. As most comic book companies won't take a story with no art work and my drawing skills are worse then my english ones, haha. I hope you enjoy.)
Issue 1
Page 1, 5 Panels
Panel 1, (SHOT FROM BEHIND) a man working on an electrical panel, one hand pressed against his ear, screwdriver, data reader and bolts floating in the air in a space station.
WJP: The microgravity reactor is poised and ready to begin in 5 minutes, Gail did you copy that?
G: crack… Will… hiss… ready?
WJP: Do Not Begin… I repeat… DO NOT BEGIN EXPERIMENT
Panel 2, Dark haired woman, glasses standing in NASA space control room, with a few other people. (SHOT FROM BEHIND SO YOU CAN SEE THE SCREEN IN THE CONTROL ROOM)
G: Start the countdown Lee; give it a 5 minute count.
Spoken from outside the Panel- “Countdown has begun-”
G: 5 minute countdown has begun William…
Spoken from outside the panel: ”Countdown 10, 9, 8, 7…”
Panel 3: Gail looking panicked speaking into her headset. (SHOT FRONT FACING)
G: William gets out, get out of there now
G: Lee what have you done…
Spoken from outside the panel – It begun on its own, I… I… didn’t do this
Panel 4, William looks at the clock on the reactor begin to countdown (SHOT OF THE CLOCK)
WJP: Abort Gail, Abort!!
G: William… crack … OUT!
Panel 5;- Implosion in space (SHOT OF A THE SPACE STATION IMPLODING)
Page 2, 5 Panels
Panel 1- 14 Years later An Older Gail speaking at what looks like a UN forum. (SHOT FROM BEHIND THE BOARD LOOKING DOWN, LIGHT SHINING ON GAIL WITH THE BOARD IN THE SHADOWS, 6 MEMBERS OF THE BOARD, 3 MEN & 3 WOMEN)
G: It’s been 14 years, since William James Peters lost his life for the study of Liquid Metal in microgravity, we lost a great mind.
Panel 2; close up of Gail, watery eyes
G: We have continued his work but have yet to find a way to bind the substances M52 with a life tissue, I feel we never will.
Panel 3, Shadowy board members looking down to her (SHOT FROM BEHIND GAIL LOOKING UP TO THEM, OUTLINED BOARD SPEAKING DOWN TO HER)
Unknown man1: So in other words you’re no closer?
Unknown woman1: Of course not & I knew we wouldn’t be when we lost him, cut the funding & we shall take it from here, Thank you for your time Miss Peters, your work has not gone unnoticed.
Panel 4: (BIRDS EYE SHOT)- The unknown members of the board.
UM1: They have sent a team out to the site has crashed. We hope to pick it up in the next hour.
UW2: Are the readings the same as before?
UM1: Yes, they are the same as D.O.L.S (Dual Organic Life System), do you think THEY sent it?
UW2: Even if THEY did THEY can’t stop us now.
Panel 5, (3 hours before the meeting -heading of panel-), a Metal sphere is heading to the planet from space (SHOT OF THE SPHERE COMING THROUGH THE ATOMSPHERE)
Page 3, 7 panels, with the 5th panel having a smaller panel within it
Panel 1, a man standing outside of his car in a forest area on a dust road looking to the sky where the sphere is heading to earth. (MAN LOOKING UP TO THE SKY, CAR DOOR OPEN)
Paul: Josie do you see that?
(Woman from in the car) What is that?
Paul: A comet or satellite? I don’t know but it’s not, far let’s go and check it out…
Panel 2, Man and woman in car (SHOT FROM BEHIND THE CAR, TO SEE THE SMOKE ABOVE THE TREE LINE) - driving down a dirt road, smoke coming from a treeline not too far away.
Josie: Look just there! What do you think it is?
Paul: could be anything, but we’ll be on the news for sure.
Panel 3, Man and Woman standing over the carter, But nothing is there, apart from footprints leaving it. Large circle imprint in the ground- then another, then more, slowly changing into a human’s footprint (SHOT OVER THE TOP)
Josie: look over there, is that… is that a foot print?!?
Panel 4, a metal pole sticking out of from behind a tree and the woman starts to walk towards it. (SHOT OF THE TREE LINE)
Josie: Paul, look at this…
Man: What is it Josie?
From behind the tree: Stay ba...ck!
Panel 5, a sliver man falls from behind the tree but he can’t keep his human like form, the metal of his arms and legs are bent and one of his fingers is a long pole, he looks more blob like then man. (SHOT FROM BEHIND THE COUPLE, OVER SHOULDER)
Josie: What are you?
Blob: Stay BACK!
Paul: Get behind me Josie…
Panel 5a, (Small panel in the right hand corner) - The metal hand reaching out with the fingers growing.
Panel 6, the metal hand has pierced through both the man and woman, looking more like a blade then a hand on the other side of her body. (SHOT FROM BEHIND THE COUPLE, WITH THE BLADE DRIPPING WITH BLOOD)
Blob: Noooooo
Josie (whispers): what are you…
Page 4, 8 panels with the 2nd being sliced into three and the 3rd being sliced together for an action scene
Panel 1, WJP is more blob than anything else; he crawls toward the car the couple came in (SHOT FROM ABOVE AS THE BLOB CRAWLS TOWARDS THE CAR)
(A few hours later-heading of panel-)
Blob: sob… sob… w…hat hav…e I DONE!
Blob: WH…ERE… AM I!
Panel 2a, his metal fingers stretch and latch onto car, but not on the handle, but straight into the side of the car, as if part of it (shot from pov)
Blob: I’m so hungry…
Panel 2b, the car door absorbs into his body and regains its shape a little more (shot from behind)
Blob: Why do I feel...?
Panel 2c, long tube like fingers come out of his arm and latch on to all different parts of the cars, slowly melting all the metal into his body through his fingers (shot at the car over shoulder showing arms absorbing)
Blob: so… STRONG!
Panel 3a, (wjp looks up shot from behind now in full human form), where there are helicopters in front of him
Voice from the helicopter: Get on the ground, face down, NOW!!!
WJP: WHERE AM I?
Panel 3b, View from the helicopter, 2 gunmen and 2 Pilots, (shot looking down on WJP and the blood and the bodies of the people he killed)
Pilot: On the Ground NOW, this is the last time I will ask!
Gunman: Locked & loaded, just give the word.
Panel 3c, the gunship opens fire on WJP, kicking up dust (shot still looking down and a dust cloud rising)
Gunman: Target hit, confirm target hit?
(A creek sound comes out the bottom of the helicopter)
Panel 3d, a thick metal pole pierces through the bottom of the gunship (shot inside the helicopter with the pole going through it)
Panel 4, From behind WJP, his arm is speared through the bottom of the chopper and spikes are coming out of every angle of the chopper. (shot from behind William, looking up to the copter)
Panel 4a, (shot of a shocked William)
Panel 5, Shows William standing in a powerful position (shot of William standing with arms out and head to the sky), screaming up to the sky, metallic tears running down.
William: What have I become???
William: GAIL!!!!! I need to get back to Gail
Page 5, 4 Panels
Panel 1, a comet heading to earth – Heading of panel 2.2 billion years ago-
Panel 2, Comet crashes into a barren earth
Panel 3, -Heading of panel 100 years later- a metallic forest has grown with a river of metal running through it
Panel 4, -Heading of panel present day a few hours later- (SHOT OF THE BODIES HALF IN THE GROUND) the bodies of Paul and Josie are being absorbed into the ground, with the destroyed helicopter in the background.
Unknown Voice from the Ground: I can begin…
Issue 2
Page 1, 4 Panels
Panel 1, (shot from behind a bald metallic man, in front of a council of 5 men made from a dull metal- the man in the middle has what seems like two wings(Lord Ore), coming out of his neck and going up the side of his head. The other 4 have crowns shaped from their own metal coming out of their heads, they’re known as north, south, east and west. -Heading 4 billion years ago-)
Lord Ore: The crimes listed against you, are above anything we have dealt with before, how do you plead?
Bald man doesn’t answer.
Lord Ore: Answer to your crimes 52, or face the never end.
52 doesn’t answer.
Panel 2, (shot close up of an angry North, face screaming)
North: You have no shame, no remorse for what you have done too your own people!!! Sentence him and have it be done with!
Panel 3, (shot of the 52’s face looking up to the council, calm look on his face)
52: I have remorse, like all in this world & the next & the next. I believe you all fools unable to see the greatness I have seen.
52: With me at the helm this world would be rid of life such as you and we would have won the war.
Panel 4, (shot of Lord Ore standing, pointing down to the man, his golden staff in his other hand and his bronze robes over his metallic body)
Lord Ore: We will always be. Men like you dream of the universe, not to learn but to conquer.
Lord Ore: I order you to be melted down and your energy source to be used to power a great comet.
Lord Ore: You will never return.
Page 2, 4 Panels
Panel 1, (shot of the 52 strapped into a circular stone coffin in an operating theatre, with Lord Ore, the 4 kings and others looking down at him. The room is white but the walls are blackened with black powder, two men closing the door on 52.)
Lord Ore: Here before you is 52, the man who wiped out a ¼ of our people, I only hope that his screams bring you peace.
Panel 2, Shot of a great fire under the stone coffin, with metal leaking out of the bottom of it.
52 thinks: I will not scream for these people, I will not waste what words I have on them!
Panel 3, (shot of smoke rising off the stone coffin, with Lord Ore above it on the other side of the window looking down)
Lord Ore: The Gravity launch we will send this comet off, never to return & the energy of 52 will suffer forever, in the cold of deep space.
Panel 4, (shot straight up from the theatre, as the comet is heading towards space)
Page 3, 4 Panels, second panel cut into 3 sections.
Panel 1, (shot of the stone coffin on a barren planet – Heading of panel 1.8 billion years later-)
Panel 2a, (shot of metal leaking out of the bottom of the stone coffin into the ground)
52 Thinking: hahaha never end has ended
Panel 2b, (shot of a pool of metal spreading across the ground)
52 Thinking: I will be new, I will become my own Lord and …
Panel 2c, (shot of small silver plants beginning to grow in the dirt)
52 Thinking: I WILL NOT FORGET LORD ORE, I WILL TAKE THIS UNIVERSE AND BURN THE CORE FROM YOUR PLANET!
Panel 3, (shot from far out of a small silver forest growing)
Panel 4, (shot of a massive metallic forest, with green starting to run through the metal and a silver river in the middle)
52 Thinking: I am not strong enough, I need a host… I need intelligence…
52 Thinking: I will make this planet my own; everything on this planet will be part of me…
52 Thinking: I will wait until my time arrives…
Page 4, 5 Panels, first panel cut into 2, fourth panel cut into 3
Panel 1a, (shot of a dirt road running through a forest, same dirt road where the metal sphere crash landed)
52 Thinking: I feel it… I feel the metal… I can almost feel my body…
Panel 1b, (shot of a metal spike coming out of the ground, sending out a beacon to space)
52 Thinking: Come to me!!
Panel 2, (shot of the metal sphere in space begin to come towards earth
Panel 3, (shot of the metal sphere crash landing on top of the spike)
52 Thinking: At last, I can grow…
Panel 4a, (shot of the metal sphere getting smaller)
Panel 4b, (shot of the top of the sphere, with a face coming out of the top, screaming)
WJP: GGAAAAIIIIIILLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!
52 Thinking: What?!
Panel 4c, (shot of the metal blob walking out of the crater)
WJP: WHHHH….. WHHHHH………
52 Thinking: No… what is happening… I need more…
Page 5, 4 Panels
Panel 1, (A strange orange glow is coming out of the soil where, Paul and Josie were swallowed by the ground)
Panel 2, (a woman’s hand reaches out from the ground, silver nails and silver veins)
Panel 3, (Josie pulls herself out of the ground, head looking down, with her black hair covering her face.)
Panel 4a, (Josie stands up looking down at her hands)
Josie: It feels good to stand again.
Panel 4b, (small panel in the corner of panel4, showing a close up on Josie’s eye which is now silver.)
Very interesting ideas.