The wet worm in the mud

by Megan Mullally
15th February 2022

The brown soil crowds the body of the small creature that slides itself across the garden over the pavement, leaving a trail of slime tracing it's path as it moves slowly creeping up to the grass as a breathe of wind blocks it's path as the wind becomes heavy and the ground begins to rise. A cold metal spade controls the worms movement as it's placing into a clear tub surrounded by mud and worms, a heavy shake is given as it's body hits against the edge of the tub. 

The warm air takes over the worms fraile body and a shadowed figure passes the tub over a glass container where a predator waits for its meal, the worm struggles to hold onto the edge of the container as it's fragile body is drowned in water and a snatch of pain overtakes it's body as the end of his body struggles for escape from the sharp teeth that latch on. It takes one final breathe and darkness is in control

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Hey Megan, I think the 2nd to last line should read "the end of it's body" - for sake of consistency (that is assuming the use of "it's" instead of "its" is intentional (which I admire if it is indeed done on purpose - even if your relationship with apostrophes and spelling is "complicated" - e.g. frail or breath (noun) are without an "e" at the end.
Otherwise, cute story - I was feeling a bit chopped in half and scared myself (having no idea what the sharp teeth attached to).
Having said that I'd change the last line to something like "and darkness takes over."
Cheers, Simon

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