Hi every one, I've found myself at that dreaded time - SUBMITTING.
I was wondering if anyone would offer any advice/editing/critique of what I have for my covering letter so far? At the moment I'm working on the 'selling of the book' part of the covering letter... So here it is...
The war was fought and won five hundred years ago. Now the seeds of war have been sown once again. Alone, frightened, a girl who remembers little recounts how she ended up imprisoned by those loyal to the dark king…
Sinister forces are once again at work in the Ten Kingdoms. Shadows and monsters are on the trail of a girl who holds the future of the kingdoms in her unassuming hands.
Nessa runs from those who hunt her, longing for home a world away, the hounds of war snapping at her heels. Hunter, a boy with a past full of secrets, risks everything to save this girl from those who would do anything to use her for their own means. Together they flee across a perilous land to find a lost friend and a creature of old that unveils secrets that will change everything forever.
...Will this capture the agents attention (for the right reasons)? It's a fantasy adventure aimed at readers 11+. Any (non rude) advice is really appreciated :)
Yes and no, I say yes because what you have there sounds more like a synopsis. But I say no because the cover letter is more about you. It's all good and all knowing about the book, but what would the agent know about you?
To break it down the cover letter should have this info.
Saying what is being sent. This will be first three chapters of your book or 10,000 words and synopsis. You will also need to tell them the genre and target audience. Which in your case will be Fantasy Adventure aimed at pre-teens.
Then you'll need to talk about your writing and reading history, it'll help if you have read books the agency have punished, but it's not needed.
Sign it off and you should be ready go send off.
Hope this helps.