If anyone can face reading part of a story for (older) children, I'd really appreciate some feedback. 'The Gnarly Man' - Does it flow? What's annoying? Punctuation mistakes? Unrealistic dialogue? Anything that jars? Thanks in advance to those who can spare the time - I know there are a million other things to be doing at this time of year.
Hi Susan,
I've added a comment - I'll apologise now because it is very very lengthy! Not because a lot needs doing, but just because I quoted a lot from your piece in order to make it simpler if you want to go over it! Hope you can salvage something helpful from my rather jumbled thoughts...
Steve - of course your comments were of use! Thank you!
I just wanted to get a wide range of comments if possible because everyone sees things differently.
Hey Susan
I posted a lengthy response on the 'View my Work' page but it hasn't showed up yet. I guess admin check them out first?
Cheers
James