Hi guys,
So last night I stayed up super late writing up a scene that takes place in one of my chapters, and when I finally finished I read through it and felt a strange feeling that I don't normally have when I finish something. I was actually proud of what I wrote? Anyway I was hoping to have a few other people comment on it and see what they think.
Thank you guys :)
Yaaay honestly I'm really chuffed with the comments I'm getting, they're just awesome :) thanks Loraine
Theodore, I've had a look, and I like it. You've got pace and plot pointers on here; the characters are building, and we are learning more about their individual circumstances. You've introduced a tangible link to the past; a key is always symbolic of things being unlocked, and doors being both opened and closed, so it's a good one. Again, I'd like to see where Alaska's story goes.
Do be careful of punctuation; I've done the 'red inking' that Timothy mentions (sorry!) because I hope it will help; but they are the technical aspects of writing that you have to master. A proof reader will pick them up, but if you don't have the luxury of one, you're going to have to be aware of them yourself.
You're right to be proud of it! More, please!
Thank you so much Timothy, honestly I thought no one would take the time to look at it but you did and it's really cheered me up, thanks a bundle and I'll make sure to read this out loud the next time I go through it. Major thanks