I am struggling to get my novel boiled down into one page, I have managed to get it down to two pages would anyone mind having a look and see if if you think it is too long and more to the point does it make sense. It does to me but I of course know the story! Thanks in advance Paul G
Hi Paul, glad you liked it. I wouldn't use Dr Barnard's name without asking first, especially as you're claiming he got his info from an outside source! Also, are you sure of the dating of his ground-breaking heart surgery being in the 50s? I remember the first transplant and it was much later than that. I think you could allude to him without using his name if the surgery itself isn't described in detail. If it is, then I'd avoid making a direct link if you haven't asked permission from his estate.
Lorraine
Hope you come back to take a look lorraine, I have just read your much tighter version and I have to say I like it very much especially as you only had my version to work from and can't possibly understand the thread but you have got it so close, Thank you. I am still a little unsure of using Christiaan Barnards Name is it ok to use the name of a real person, he does a wonderful job in the story though. He died way back in 2001 do I need permission to use his name, it is in way of a homage, had I not had my memory problem from being a boy I'm sure surgery would have been my calling.
Regards Paul G
Thanks all for taking the time to look and comment, I haven't had a look at what you have written yet Lorraine but I know from experience it will be helpful. Oh by the way Kereen I'm Paul, Tom is the protagonist but I take that as a compliment that remembered his name I did wonder if you saw through the thin veil and realized I had based Tom on me, not the near death bit though but when I think about what I got up to as a kid I'm surprised I didn't have more than one near death experience!!!
Again thanks for taking the time. Regards Paul.