I am struggling to get my novel boiled down into one page, I have managed to get it down to two pages would anyone mind having a look and see if if you think it is too long and more to the point does it make sense. It does to me but I of course know the story! Thanks in advance Paul G
I've had a go at it, Paul. Too long, doesn't make sense in places, misses some crucial info - who else has Peter been, apart from Ghengis Khan? A list of one is not good. Have a look, and see what you think.
I can only tell you what I have found to be my own problem. Using too many words to describe what I want to say. I assume you are working on a synopsis? Concentrate on the idea (maybe) that you want to get across and not so much the wordy emotion?
For example, my novel hooks are …
Tagline: The Evidence lies.
Logline: Mary awakens without memory, in hospital, and is released against her wishes to a family she knows is not hers.
I'll give it a go, but I have an essay to finish first - will next week do?