writing a love scene

by David Castanho
23rd April 2014

Hi everyone

I need help writing a love scene for my book in progress (The Heavenly Sequence) but to be honest Im struggling a little with the wording. I want to write something that readers would find romantic and true. The scene takes place at a pond at at midnight. Thank you

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Romance is often best conveyed by suggestion, leave plenty to the imagination of the reader and he/she will think you have written a brilliant sequence.

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Rosa Johnson
26/04/2014

I like the above comment of "wallop it all down."

That's a great description of writing a first draft.

I have also read in a blog elsewhere on this site an author advocating writing the first draft very quickly, including inserting instructions for herself such as "write description of room" for when she is working on the second draft.

If a certain part of your novel is causing a block in writing your first draft you could skip that part temporarily and come back to it.

Who knows, you might decide to completely change that scene when you come to the second draft anyway.

If you do decide to keep it, the above advice will be very useful and you will have the additional advantage of knowing the characters better.

Of course, if you are already on your second draft then the above won't be very useful...

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Katy W
24/04/2014

I agree with Carla & Carmelita.

I think I'd just wallop it all down to get an outline, then really think about the whole sensory side - not just the participants but everything within the setting too. For me the best love scenes work by being very sensitive & suggesting/hinting at actions rather than heavy handedly throwing it all at the reader. To do it well you'll need to really get to know your characters - all their hopes & fears, loves & hates etc, so it's worthwhile spending time on each one as a side exercise.

Good luck & I'll look forward to reading it!

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