Punctuation problem...AGAIN!

by ELSIE BYRON
4th July 2017

I'm coming to a part in my story where my little girl gets into a frightening situation. She ends up sobbing quite hard and tries to talk at the same time. My problem is, how do I punctuate between sobs? It would go something like this. 'I'm...sorry...I...shouldn't have...done...it.' I just want to make sure I put the correct punctuation in between the words. Thanks

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Maybe also try:

"I'm sorry," she choked, "I shouldn't have done it." She sobbed hard, tears rolling down her cheeks.

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09/07/2017

Thank you Jimmy I like the stuttering it and the way it's explained it makes sense

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'I I I'm s-s-sorry! I I I sh-shou-ouldn't h-have d-d-d-done it,' she managed to get out between sobs.

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