I'm coming to a part in my story where my little girl gets into a frightening situation. She ends up sobbing quite hard and tries to talk at the same time. My problem is, how do I punctuate between sobs? It would go something like this. 'I'm...sorry...I...shouldn't have...done...it.' I just want to make sure I put the correct punctuation in between the words. Thanks
Thank you Lorraine and Dan it seems this would be the best way to go to explain she's sobbing. Thanks again
I would avoid the ellipses, which will look really messy after more than one short line. As suggested, just tell the reader that she is sobbing hard, and leave it to them to work out.
Lorraine
Hi Elsie, I would say "I'm sorry, I shouldn't have done it," she sobbed.
Easier to read and looks more professional than "I'm...sorry...I...shouldn't...etc"